The first time to breed animal is almost five years ago, and my family and I bred some fish at home. My family has mom, dad, younger sister, and I, and they wanted to accompany animals afterwards, so and I. we thought that we could have a lot of fun with animals, and every hour and moment to play with them. Although we knew that feeding and cleaning animals are troublesome and boring, we still could enjoy them on the free time without any pressure.
In such a month, and on such a day, my family and I want to pet store to buy some fish. My mom decided to buy fish because she thought fish is easy to breed and we didn’t have to clean it with lots of energy. My dad, sister and I agreed with that statement. We went into the store as soon as we saw a lot of fish swimming in the fishbowl. It’s amazing and surprising, and then we started finding fish that we wanted. Finally, I found the fish which color was blue and yellow, its body is small and long, and its color had a little gloss on its body. Because of its beautiful shape and color, I suggested them to buy three these kinds of fishes, and they agreed. After that, we happily brought them and buy some stuff of fish to home.
When we arrived at home, we started to manage about fish’s house. We had fishbowl, water, decoration (rocks, waterweeds, etc.), lamplight, and filter unit, etc. Although we only spent this time almost one hour, we still tired in this process. After finishing it, we put fish into the fishbowl, and then we watched the fish swimming inside the fishbowl together. We were relaxed and comfortable to watch it, it was attractive.
However, we really didn’t know how to breed fish actually, we just knew to feed them and clean it. Few weeks later, all fish were died and came to the top. And then we guessed that the fish’s age was too short or we didn’t do well on this stuff. They didn’t know how it happened, either and I. After knowing this event, we had to put them to the trash and also missed them because we didn’t have accompanying animals anymore. Although we had a hard time and felt bad, we could remember that we accompany them with happiness and fun when the fish still lived in the fishbowl. That would my unforgettable memory with these cute creature.
Your title should be 'My first time breeding an animal'
ReplyDeleteThe first time to breed animal is (was) almost five years ago,
Although we knew that feeding and cleaning animals are (is) troublesome and boring, we still could enjoy them on the free time without any pressure (have fun with them in our free time)
so and I. we thought that (Hmmm?)
we happily brought them and buy some stuff of fish to home (his doesn't make sense. Please rewrite)
I suggested them to (I suggested that they) buy three (of) these kinds of fishes
In such a month, and on such a day (A day such as what?)
(A) Few weeks later, all (the) fish were (erase were) died and came (floated, not came) to the top
They didn’t know how it happened, either and I. (Who are "they")
Good work overall Ping. Correct and I'll grade it.
correction:
ReplyDeleteMy first time breeding an animal
The first time to breed animal was almost five years ago, and my family and I bred some fish at home. My family has mom, dad, younger sister, and I, and they wanted to accompany animals afterwards as me. we thought that we could have a lot of fun with animals, and every hour and moment to play with them. Although we knew that feeding and cleaning animals is troublesome and boring, we still have fun with them in our free time.
On the fine morning, my family and I want to pet store to buy some fish. My mom decided to buy fish because she thought fish is easy to breed and we didn’t have to clean it with lots of energy. My dad, sister and I agreed with that statement. We went into the store as soon as we saw a lot of fish swimming in the fishbowl. It’s amazing and surprising, and then we started finding fish that we wanted. Finally, I found the fish which color was blue and yellow, its body is small and long, and its color had a little gloss on its body. Because of its beautiful shape and color, I suggested that they buy three of these kinds of fishes, and they agreed. After that, we bought them and then went home happily.
When we arrived at home, we started to manage about fish’s house. We had fishbowl, water, decoration (rocks, waterweeds, etc.), lamplight, and filter unit, etc. Although we only spent this time almost one hour, we still tired in this process. After finishing it, we put fish into the fishbowl, and then we watched the fish swimming inside the fishbowl together. We were relaxed and comfortable to watch it, it was attractive.
However, we really didn’t know how to breed fish actually, we just knew to feed them and clean it. Few weeks later, all the fish died and floated to the top. And then we guessed that the fish’s age was too short or we didn’t do well on this stuff. My family member didn’t know how it happened, either and I. After knowing this event, we had to put them to the trash and also missed them because we didn’t have accompanying animals anymore. Although we had a hard time and felt bad, we could remember that we accompany them with happiness and fun when the fish still lived in the fishbowl. That would my unforgettable memory with these cute creature.